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This will be for my newest Journal CCS, the Character is my fursona Rieka
I'm actually quite happy with the outcome of this picture :3 critiques welcome :D
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:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Impact

I'm throwing myself on the bandwagon, as I need someone to practice on. Ahem.

First of all, don't get offended by the ratings. I'm a harsh critic, as I've told you before.

First, vision. It has the highest rating, as it represent the theme "Journal" well. The composition is good, and the colors are decent. The text makes it clear too.

Next up, originality. As your handwriting and character is original, the overall idea is well used, so that drags it down. If you had drawn Rieka in a different angle, and/or added some other elements too, then the originality would have been better. But I'm not here to offer you advice on originality, as that's something you have to find out on your own.

Technique. The technique is simple, and cartoony. But I'm wondering, as Rieka is a Shiba Inu, a canine, why does she look like a feline? She's a little too thin, and her facial features makes her look more like a cat than a dog. Make her more chubby, get rid of that bump on her back, look up some references for dogs, and fatten her legs, as it looks like they're going to break any second now <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/a/a…" width="19" height="19" alt="^^;" title="Sweating a little..."/>
Her left (our right) back leg is anatomically wrong. It's hard to explain, so it would have been better if you could look up some references and tutorials. The legs are longer on the other side than the others, so you probably want to take note of that too in future works.
The shading is alright, but I see you have tried to shade the fur a bit, but only some places. Either have simple shading, or shade the fur completely.
The eye is not anatomically correct either, but this isn't a realistic attempt, so I won't get into that.

Impact. As it doesn't evoke any feelings to me, it does have a affection on me, somehow. It might be the eye, as it has a nice color.

Overall, this is a nice drawing, and as always, I hope this helps you :]